Wednesday, March 4, 2009

Bright writing, part 2

Take a look at Wade Malcolm's story in today's Living section for a couple reasons:

One, note how the sentence length and rhythm gives you the sense of the physical action that's taking place. The splitting up of 'Again and again' into three lines goes for the same effect.

Two, note the verbs -- flipped, twirled, juggled, spun, snapped. Lots of strong verbs that make the action vivid.

And, as a bonus, the words above, around and over -- which aren't necessarily the most active words -- are stronger because of the way the piece is constructed. They almost change into verbs because of the action they convey.